Comments on: The Apartment (Part 1) http://www.heavenskyy.com/the-apartment-part-1/ Read.Write.Publish Thu, 13 May 2010 03:12:22 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.6 hourly 1 By: sugar http://www.heavenskyy.com/the-apartment-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-513 sugar Wed, 11 Nov 2009 00:17:08 +0000 http://www.heavenskyy.com/?p=1751#comment-513 The poetic form has no real restrictions like writing a paragraph. Even though you can be free with paragraph but with poetry there’s that abandonees when it comes to proper grammar or places were words belong that sometimes when they are smashed together doesn’t give the same effect. The lines matter. The lines always matter in poetry; it gives pauses (like periods) but I think lines gives longer pauses than period does. The language and literary deceives are freer to roam than they would be in a paragraph. Again, you can’t maintain the same rhythm balance in paragraphs. The imagery and tones are easier to expose and compose. Sonya Sones wrote a beautiful young adult book called ‘what my mother doesn’t know’ and it’s written in verses. I remember when I was younger I thought it was wonderful and always wanted to try it. I have forgotten about it until I started writing this story (original in paragraphs) but I was like...there are a lot of things, images, and descriptions I want to use but I don’t want limits. The poetic form has no real restrictions like writing a paragraph. Even though you can be free with paragraph but with poetry there’s that abandonees when it comes to proper grammar or places were words belong that sometimes when they are smashed together doesn’t give the same effect.

The lines matter.

The lines always matter in poetry; it gives pauses (like periods) but I think lines gives longer pauses than period does.
The language and literary deceives are freer to roam than they would be in a paragraph. Again, you can’t maintain the same rhythm balance in paragraphs.

The imagery and tones are easier to expose and compose.

Sonya Sones wrote a beautiful young adult book called ‘what my mother doesn’t know’ and it’s written in verses. I remember when I was younger I thought it was wonderful and always wanted to try it. I have forgotten about it until I started writing this story (original in paragraphs) but I was like…there are a lot of things, images, and descriptions I want to use but I don’t want limits.

]]> By: jpd http://www.heavenskyy.com/the-apartment-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-512 jpd Tue, 10 Nov 2009 23:33:16 +0000 http://www.heavenskyy.com/?p=1751#comment-512 I don't know enough about "poetic form" to really answer... but has that ever stopped me before?? I think it would feel the same to me if I read this as paragraphs. I'm not sure what is different in the story, because even standard paraphraphs have a rythm and flow, so I guess my question is, what changed when you converted this into a poetic format? Did you add more imagery, or change the pace of telling? That's my ignorence asking the question-- and is not criticism at all. I like the imagery and the place-setting and the mood-setting and the descriptive ways you tell it. "His fleshy lies covering me like truth" or "my family told me he was no good, but he WAS good..." Those are some nice phrases! To answer your questions, yes, I think I can see where the story is going and it does leave me guessing what comes next! I don’t know enough about “poetic form” to really answer… but has that ever stopped me before??

I think it would feel the same to me if I read this as paragraphs. I’m not sure what is different in the story, because even standard paraphraphs have a rythm and flow, so I guess my question is, what changed when you converted this into a poetic format? Did you add more imagery, or change the pace of telling?

That’s my ignorence asking the question– and is not criticism at all. I like the imagery and the place-setting and the mood-setting and the descriptive ways you tell it. “His fleshy lies covering me like truth” or “my family told me he was no good, but he WAS good…” Those are some nice phrases!

To answer your questions, yes, I think I can see where the story is going and it does leave me guessing what comes next!

]]> By: sugar http://www.heavenskyy.com/the-apartment-part-1/comment-page-1/#comment-511 sugar Tue, 10 Nov 2009 16:34:03 +0000 http://www.heavenskyy.com/?p=1751#comment-511 Just decided to try my test on writing short stories in poetic form(Poetic Prose).... it looked easy when I read about it but...once I started writing..Oh boy.. Be honest... what I'm looking for is rather you can see it going somewhere... Does it leave you guessing... Do you want more? Is it telling a story and still keeping the poetic form? Just decided to try my test on writing short stories in poetic form(Poetic Prose)…. it looked easy when I read about it but…once I started writing..Oh boy..

Be honest…

what I’m looking for is rather you can see it going somewhere…

Does it leave you guessing…

Do you want more?

Is it telling a story and still keeping the poetic form?

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