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Comment on Science My Ass by Chrisd

Chrisd — Thu, 13 May 2010 03:12:22 +0000

I think you are a bit confused God is not science it is has to do with faith the belief in something even though it cannot be tested or proven. Yes there are many science theories and sometimes people confuse them with truths and reality but it is not always so. You should not limit yourself simply because a person told you not to pursue it. God is only the love you have and the love you can share, you have the free will to do anything you want even if it kills you. I do agree that many science related truths are false because they are only theories and the media loves to print new theories before they are proven. I go by the old adage, “do not believe anything you hear and only 50% of what you read.” By these words only believe 50% of what you have just read so I am agreeing with you on 50% of what you have written.
Have peace and keep writing never let critics stop you from what “you” want to do.

Comment on The Last Time I Saw Granny (part 3) by jpd

jpd — Sat, 08 May 2010 18:24:17 +0000

Hey KROC, I am still reading and re-reading your awesome story. I hope you don’t mind if I share it with friends.

Comment on Tiffany Williams by WritingSugar

WritingSugar — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 23:34:26 +0000

Yeah..now I see what you mean.

I would change the wording just a little. Maybe expand on it somehow that it’s not too obvious but at the same time, we can understand it was her guilt that made her feel as if she were the killer. This can be insert in the “during her daydream she….”…

You can even describe the shooting..in a way like she felt as she was holding the gun, her finger pulling the trigger…

Just a thought..but it’s up to you.

Comment on Tiffany Williams by McGonz

McGonz — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 23:07:53 +0000

Thanks a lot for the encouragement.

“That was when she killed Charles” wasn’t actually a mistake. It was supposed to be an indication of her guilt. Maybe that’s a little confusing.

Comment on Tiffany Williams by WritingSugar

WritingSugar — Mon, 22 Mar 2010 19:46:49 +0000

I thought this was wonderful story. I like the way it was told. Starting with a little bit of poetry and some sentence and ending with the same, was a nice beginning and closing.

There are few mistakes here and there that you might want to revise… like this part…

“There are noises from behind, people stupid enough to come down this alley. This is when she kills Charlie.”
Is it supposed to be …he kills charlies…?

Overall, I enjoyed it.

Comment on Peace in War by MsBaig

MsBaig — Fri, 12 Feb 2010 00:36:12 +0000

Amazing.

Comment on u sux by Charley

Charley — Thu, 11 Feb 2010 17:19:14 +0000

This is funny, please say it’s meant as a joke…
I like how you revert from saying ‘people’ to ppl.

Comment on GHOSTWORLD by WritingSugar

WritingSugar — Fri, 05 Feb 2010 02:17:51 +0000

wow..i loved this one. I thought it was touching and hitting all the points it needed to be hit…

i liked how you’re telling it in a story way as if i was listening to a conversation… well done.

Comment on u sux by WritingSugar

WritingSugar — Fri, 05 Feb 2010 02:10:50 +0000

lol… i thought this was funny and quite… i like the slang you used instead out actually writing the whole piece….

is this supposed to be serious or was it meant as a joke?

i like how at the end, u (the reader) feel a little “dumb” for reading it and actually maybe understanding it.

i think you forgot ‘to’ between they force you (to)repeat yourself

Comment on The Last Time I Saw Granny (part 3) by jpd

jpd — Sat, 23 Jan 2010 02:41:48 +0000

“I was glad not to be her earpiece anymore and I closed my eyes and tried not to think of anything that happened that day.”

I re-read this story from top-to-bottom again. If this is truly your ending then I would only suggest one more clause:

“…and tried not to think of anything that happened that day, or anything else at all…”

I still think it’s an unresolved ending to an otherwise brilliant story.

If you still soliciting a title for this…

“The Leash”